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Should I continue this with a sequel?

  • Posted on September 12, 2010 at 4:32 pm

I am writing a story about a girl’s depression,her hope,her trust,and finally,her suicide. I’m 11 and I need some help on if I should or not,continue this. This is cut up into bits,so I’m only giving you a bit.
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Screams and bottles crashing against where what everyone heard in the suburban town. Johanna screamed again,and was met with another thrown bottle crashing against her face.
“You ugly little piece of crap!” Her mother roared,throwing her newly opened bottle of whiskey at the 17 year old,making Johanna sob even harder than she had before. Everything had gone so well,she thought,ignoring her mother’s constant screaming and hollering.Johanna’s mom finally stopped her rampage,and dismissed herself to another bottle of whiskey.Johanna quietly tiptoed to her room,choking sobs emerging from the cad’s throat. Why did her mother HAVE to ruin her 6 months sobriety by a simple drink of red wine?Their lives had all gone so well,she thought,and just let herself cry.People heard her screams,she knew,but yet no one had stopped to ask what was going on.She couldn’t take it anymore. She couldn’t take the insults at school just because she was lesbian,she couldn’t take being a serial killer’s daughter anymore,she couldn’t take her mom’s alcoholism,she couldn’t take her emotions.
When she heard her mom’s door slam for the night,she grabbed what was left of her money and ran down to the gun store. This is it,my last night of suffering. My last night in Manhattan. She quickly bought the gun and showed the man her fake ID. She ran into the middle of the street,and put the gun to her head,and pulled the trigger. Johanna fell to the ground,her eyeballs rolling to the back of her head. Crowds of people swarmed about the girl,asking such stupid questions.
“Is she dead?” One elderly woman asked,met by only quiet “Yes”s. She was such a beautiful girl,they all thought,and ended it only 3 weeks until her 18th birthday…
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Is this good? That’s it for now.

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